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HORROR 1st Scene Screenplay – FEAR OF THE DOPPELGANGER, by Jonah Jones

 

Genre: Horror, Thriller

The plot involves the lives of two versions of the same man who made a different decision years previously. As the story progresses, they both learn about the legend that if you meet your doppelganger, you will die.

CAST LIST:

Linda: Cassandra Sirois
Pamela: Vanessa Quaglaira
Narrator: Val Cole
Michael: James Murray
Phil: Nick Wicht

Get to know the writer:

 1. What is your screenplay about?

Michael; a man who made a decision in his teenage years which he regrets and his other self, Micky, who made the right decision and is now his doppelganger. The doppelganger knows about the protagonist and also knows that if they ever meet, they will both die.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Mystery, thriller, sci-fi.

3. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Having the two characters played by the same actor wouldn’t work in any other medium except perhaps a novel. The science behind interference patterns can easily be explained but makes for great visual moments of patterns and wave-forms. Any cinematographer would drool at the possibilities.

4. How would you describe this script in two words?

Waves collide

5. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

I’ve answered this before but I don’t remember what I said so I’ll go with Ben Hur (the Charlton Heston version)

6. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

This is very much draft one because I’ve been busy on other projects but probably two months.

7. How many stories have you written?

Again – I’ve answered this before and I can’t remember. I’m currently away from my main computer – at the Myrtle Beach International Film Festival where they’re showing Letters Home, a film I directed. To return to the question; I’ve been writing stories in one form or another for forty years so I have a fair few of them on my hard drive.

8. What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the
most times in your life?)

Everything on my car CD player. Certain songs will always be in my head. Mostly 1960s British. Just heard Fields of Gold in a MacDonald’s. Could be that.

9. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Trying to make the science of interference patterns easy to understand but not allowing the film to become a schoolroom.

10. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Wild-life, playing guitar, cartooning. I recently took up film directing and I’m enjoying that very much.

11. You entered your screenplay via FilmFreeway. What has been your
experiences working with the submission platform site?

They are easy to work with and efficient with it. I also hawk our films around the festivals. Film Freeway makes that so much easier.

12. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings
on the initial feedback you received?

This site feels like a home from home. The atmosphere is always encouraging, rather than critical and all of us could do with more carrot and less stick.

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: Kimberly Villarruel

Camera Op: Mary Cox

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HISTORY 1st Scene Screenplay – SANDS OF LANIKAI, by Greg Blair

 

Genre: Historical Fiction

Before the first bombs were dropped on December 7th, 1941, two men arrived at different moments on the windward side of the island–in Kailua/Lanikai. One was bent on discovery; the other on destruction.

CAST LIST:

William Sands: James Murray
Paul Sands: Nick Wicht
Narrator: Val Cole
Isamu Anzai: Dan Fox
Takahashi: Fabio Abreu
Healani Lewis: Cassandra Sirois

Get to know the writer:

 1. What is your screenplay about?

Before the first bombs were dropped on December 7th 1941, two men arrived at different moments on the windward side of O’ahu. One was bent on discovery… the other, on destruction.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Historical Fiction / Mystery Romance

3. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Sands of Lanikai is the “what if” story of Paul Sands, a new arrival to the islands. Mystified by a sudden family tragedy and blindsided by an unforeseen coming of age romance, he unwittingly confronts an undercover intruder who could change it all. Set against the backdrop of beautiful and rustic Windward O’ahu during the days before and after the attacks on Pearl Harbor, Sands of Lanikai paints a vivid picture of historic times and historical personalities. It twists and turns through a time period we all think we know well… only to entice, charm and surprise.

4. How would you describe this script in two words?

Mystery Romance

5. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Saving Private Ryan

6. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

On and off, four years.

7. How many stories have you written?

Two

8. What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Wicked Games – Chris Isaak

9. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Until a script is green lighted, do we ever really finish?

10. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Music

11. You entered your screenplay via FilmFreeway. What has been your experiences working with the submission platform site?

Similar to IMDB, but free.

12. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The festival’s guarantee of a thoughtful and insightful feedback to my script entry.

Responses received from the festival, including those on formatting, dialog and cinematic structure have been very insightful.

 

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: Kimberly Villarruel

Camera Op: Mary Cox

MYSTERY 1st Scene Screenplay – THE COLD SLEEPER, by John Lucas Bowman

 

Genre: Mystery, Thriller

Hudson, hotshot CIA Agent with photographic memory, learns that his slightly senile Grandpa is a forgotten Soviet sleeper agent who is reactivated when his former handler Korolov escapes a Russian mental institution.

CAST LIST:

Hudson: Allan Cooke
Narrator: Olivia Jon
Luddmilla: Jennifer Vallance
Becker: Shawn Devlin

Get to know the writer:

 1. What is your screenplay about?

Hudson, hotshot CIA Agent with photographic memory, learns that his slightly senile Grandpa is a forgotten Soviet sleeper agent who is reactivated when his former handler Korolov escapes a Russian mental institution.

2. What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Action Comedy

3. Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

It’s a tale of conflicting loyalties, of compassion and what it means to be family, and an exploration of what to do when you fall in love with the enemy. Those are very human topics most spies struggle with. – But mostly because the movie is funny.

4. How would you describe this script in two words?

Great entertainment!

5. What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Some like it hot.

6. How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I wish I could crank it out over the weekend, but it took some doing and a couple of @#$% rewrites.

7. How many stories have you written?

Enough to cease counting.

8. What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Everything Clapton.

9. What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Finishing something is no problem. Making something compelling is the real challenge. (for me)

10. Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

The search for intelligent life on earth.

11. What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Having a screenplay read out loud is a valuable experience that reveals whether the script works or not. The initial feedback was helpful in the rewrite.

 

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Op: Mary Cox

 

TV PILOT 1st Scene of KODAK MOMENT, by John Cruz Alarid

When a vintage camera is accidentally found at a flea market, long buried secrets about the JFK assassination stand to be reborn. Paranoid camera buff JIM turns to his film developer grandfather GRAMPS and Chinese reporter girlfriend NATALIE race the clock to bring the ultimate truth to light, even as forces of the Illuminati hunt both of them down.

Genre: Drama, Political, Crime, Thriller

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Laura Kyswaty
Jim: James Boutcher
Ester: Julie McCarthy
Natalie: Lindsay Rolland Mills
Pilot: Luke Robinson
Gramps: Brandon Knox

 Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

Kodak Moment is a chilling thriller TV pilot spec script about the ILLUMINATI, a secret Dark Organization that conspires to control world affairs by masterminding events, governments and corporations.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

When a vintage camera is accidentally found at a garage sale and the film developed, long buried secrets about the JFK assassination stand to be reborn, setting off a spiraling turn of events and discoveries that threaten our heroes lives and their countries’ national security. A British journalist and her American conspiracy-minded boyfriend race the clock, the NSA and the ILLUMINATI to bring the ultimate truth to light. JFK meets EMEMY OF THE STATE and THE X-FILES.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Conspiracy theories rule the media. The timing is perfect for a Showtime/HBO style series that exposes the truth of the Illuminati and its intentions regarding Genetically Modified Organisms (GMO’s), the Iraq War, the ’08 recession, Global Warming and the Roswell 1947 UFO crash.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

My favorite all time movie is Robert Wise’s The Day the Earth Stood Still. favorite movies are sci-fi thrillers as well as romantic comedies.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I have been working on KODAK MOMENT since 1999. I first wrote it as a feature script. It won Best Feature Screenplay in the 2006 Moondance International Film Festival and some other minor accolades. I was challenged to adapt it as TV series. My first draft finished 4th in the Over One Hour category in the recent Larry Brody’s People’s Pilot writing competition.

How many stories have you written?

So far I’ve written five screenplays and one TV Pilot script.

1). PSYCHIC WARRIORS is an Action Thriller written along the lines of the X-MEN and BOURNE IDENTITY franchises that follows the journey of a Marine helicopter pilot and family man who receives psychic powers from an unmanned alien spaceship and is recruited by the CIA. But when he learns of the Agency’s plans, he must escape back home and protect his family.

2.) LUCIFER’S REVENGE is a Horror Thriller that follows the journey of LUCIFER who was cast down unto Hell for his disagreement over the fate of mankind. However, God agreed to give him seven years of unchecked reign over Earth before the Armageddon. In 2021, he returns to possess the President of the United States. His goal: save mankind before the coming of Christ wreaks absolute destruction.

3.) NUMBER ONE RULE! is a showbiz comedy about a radio jock who enters therapy to help him come to terms with certain childhood issues so that he can marry a rich daddy’s girl and live the good life.

4.) The Road To Shambala is a high-spirited romantic comedy with a pulse-pounding rock ‘n’ roll flavor, set against the exotic and picturesque land of China. The story centers on a hapless American musician who, through a twist of fate, is not only given an opportunity to live his dream of performing on stage, but is also given a second chance to find love with the one woman he could never forget.

The Road To Shambala is currently under review at Paramount and Universal. They’ve had it since June. Still waiting for a response. No news is good news.

I’m current working on my 6th feature script, BLUE COATS, an action adventure about U.S. Marshals on the hunt for a fugitive on the Indian Reservation. BLUE COATS is U.S. Marshals meets The X-Files on the Indian Reservation.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

I survived the Sixties. I’m a classic rocker. AC/DC’s top on my long list of favorite tunes. I love music. Even though some critics frown against indicating what music to use in scripts, I often do it. It helps me write.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

My biggest obstacle I’ve had with Kodak Moment is developing it into a TV series. TV is an entirely different animal with a complete a separate set rules to follow.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Besides writing, I’m passionate about Rock N Roll. I recently bought myself a Roland digital drum set and started taking drum lessons. My fantasy is to sit in on for a set with AC/DC.

You entered your screenplay via FilmFreeway. What has been your experiences working with the submission platform site?

My experience entering my script via FilmFreeway was a breeze. The site is very user friendly. I refer submitting PDF files of my scripts. Printing scripts gets costly.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The opportunity of winning a table reading of my script greatly influenced me wanting to enter your festival. A table reading by actors is an excellent tool in determining what works and what doesn’t in ones script. I’ve had two of my scripts table read by actors. I highly recommend it.

The feedback I received from your reader was excellent. I took some of the suggestions was able to tighten down and trim my script by a couple pages. I’m considering re-entering in the next competition.

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

WATCH Mid-Year 1st SCENE SCREENPLAY Winners (January-June 2017)

Watch the Winning 1st SCENE Screenplay winners for the first half of 2017:

 

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – GOOD INTENTIONS
June 2017 Reading
by Sandy Tovray Greenberg

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – GRAVITY’S PULL
June 2017 Reading
by Robert Sivigny

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – AVES
May 2017 Reading
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ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – ROUND TRIP
May 2017 Reading
by Sherwin Allen

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – TRISKEL
May 2017 Reading
by Brian K. Palmer
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SANDSTORM
April 2017 Reading
Written by Neil Chase

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – PAST PRESENCE
April 2017 Reading
Written by Kevin Mongelli
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – SPARKS
April 2017 Reading
Written by Jon Freda

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – THE DEBT
April 2017 Reading
Written by Michelle Patkowski
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – WELCOME TO ARCADIA
March 2017 Reading
Written by Jason Lan

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – EVEN HERE I EXIST
March 2017 Reading
Written by Dylan Stump

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – REARRANGING ROXY
March 2017 Reading
Written by Bridget Bell McMahon

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – MONSTER MURDER MYSTERY
March 2017 Reading
Written by Arran McDermott

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – THE COURIER
March 2017 Reading
Written by Michael Dambrosio

ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – BROKEN FRAME
February 2017 Reading
Written by Stephen Boncella
ACTOR1st SCENE Screenplay – EKKO
February 2017 Reading
Written by Johnny Walker

ACTOR1st SCENE Script – FAN SITE
January 2017 Reading
Written by Elisha Barnes
ACTOR1st SCENE Script – OCD
January 2017 Reading
Written by Quyen Tran

ACTOR1st SCENE Script – INT. CAR – NIGHT
January 2017 Reading
Written by Martin Keady

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Jason Lan – March 2017 1st SCENE Screenplay Winner

Winning Screenplay – WELCOME TO ARCADIA
Written by Jasan LanCAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Frances Townend
GENERAL SHADE – Peter Mark Raphael
BOY – Jonah Akler-Silliman
KAI – Christopher Huron
DEKKIAN WARLORD – Charles Gordon
KAYLA – Vanessa Quagliara

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Fantasy, Family

A toy maker seeking to restore his family’s name has to find one of the stones of Arcadia to save his city from the powerful witch inclined on its destruction.


Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

A toymaker seeking to restore his family’s name has find one of the stones of Arcadia to save his city from the powerful witch inclined on its destruction.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Adventure / fantasy / sci-fi

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

The movie is about family connection, sacrifices for the better good all in the steampunk world contributing to stunning visuals if done properly. The depth of the supporting characters and subplots were carefully designed.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Complex storytelling

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The Dark Knight

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

About 9 months from conception of idea to final draft submission

How many stories have you written?

This is my 5th screenplay. Hopefully it will be a selected as a finalist like every single of the previous screenplay I’ve written (in at least one festival / competition)

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Varies on the mood but generally movie sound tracks generating strong emotions; Hans zimmer, audiomachine, etc. For this particular script I drew mainly from never forget by gothic storm for the hero’s main theme and destiny of the chosen by immediate music.

I do not always find the right music to draw from for my character’s theme however unfinished life by Audiomachine was perfect for the character Master Kai in my script titled Conjurers.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Structuring the final part of the script.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Watching movies, understanding people and their motivation, dissecting the logic of why things happen in life.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Feedbacks show a good understanding of the story, meaning care had been taken to read the script properly. All my scripts are multi layered. Feedbacks provided do not always show an understanding of the different story telling layers but WILDsound delivered which makes their feedback worth my time and useful.

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Producer/Director: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting: Sean Ballantyne

Bridget Bell McMahon – March 2017 1st SCENE Screenplay Winner

Winning Screenplay – REARRANGING ROXY
Written by Bridget Bell McMahonCAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Frances Townend
CAL – Peter Mark Raphael
GENE – Jonah Akler-Silliman
T-BONE – Christopher Huron
ROXY – Vanessa Quagliara
MS. BARNES – Kayla Farris

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Drama, Musical

A desperate, talented rocker strikes a deal with someone worse than the devil: her sick father, in a last effort attempt to keep her rock star dreams alive.


Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

A woman desperate to keep her rock-star
dreams alive, and the one person standing in the way, her estranged father.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Dramedy, with a music-themed
subgenre

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Rearranging Roxy is a
story every family can relate to, passionate people following their hearts
while learning about themselves and each other along the way. Low budget
with female leads, a quirky cast that includes rockers and senior citizens,
and set during the run-up to Christmas, this screenplay has something for
everyone.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Unexpected growth

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Chinatown. No
matter how many times I watch it, I always discover something “new.”

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

About two years with
tons of rewrites.

How many stories have you written?

“McLeary’s
Mulligan,” I have written four feature screenplays.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Wow. I grew up in Woodstock, New York, where music is
practically a religion, I played classical piano for a decade, sang in a
rock band and a choir, and my older son is a musician and deejay. I can’t
pick just one!

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

For this
screenplay, time management was tough. In addition to a full-time job, I’m a
married mom to two teens, one with a disability, and I volunteer time to
help women with tax and financial problems. I carve out time every day to
write, read and study the craft, but it’s a challenge.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Live music in
any form, practicing yoga and compassion, and finding the perfect key lime
pie.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I want to see more movies made with
amazing leads who happen to be women. This festival is perfect for me. The
feedback I received was thorough, thoughtful and definitely enriched the
script’s depth without trying to “change” it.

TV CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or TV SPEC Script
Voted #1 TV Contest in North America.
Screenplay CONTESTSUBMIT your Best Scene Screenplay or FEATURE Script
FULL FEEDBACK on all entries. Get your script performed
Screenplay CONTESTFIRST SCENE (first 10pgs) Screenplay CONTEST
Submit the first stages of your film and get full feedback!

 

 

 

Producer/Director: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting: Sean Ballantyne