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Screenplay Festival: January 14, 2018 Event

The FEEDBACK Screenplay Festival’s 2nd event of 2018 features a reading of an original screenplay of the RICK & MORTY TV show, plus two short scripts and 22 best scenes.

If there was a theme to this evening, it would be TENSE COMEDY.

CAST LIST: Peter-Mark Raphael, Val Cole, Scott McCulloch, Gabriel Darku, Elizabeth Rose Morriss, Ali Chappell

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TV SPEC Script Reading of RICK and MORTY TV Show, by Daniel Richardson

Genre: Comedy, Animation

After shooting Summer and Morty with a ray that forces them to spout their inner monologues, Rick takes Beth out on a space adventure for her birthday.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Rick: Scott McCulloch
Morty: Gabriel Darku
Beth: Val Cole
Summer: Ali Chappell
Jerry: Peter-Mark Raphael

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10 page SCI-FI SHORT Script Reading of VIRTUALLY FINE by Gil Saint

Genre: Sci-FI, Comedy, Satire

What good is living in the world of tomorrow if you’re still haunted by all the problems of today? That’s the question at the center of this dystopian dark comedy. But science may finally have an answer: an experimental device that can change anyone’s world view, even Miller, the future’s most pathetic sad-sack of a man.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Miller: Peter-Mark Raphael
Jeanie: Ali Chappell
Virtual Shrink: Val Cole
Clown: Gabriel Darku

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13 page EUROPEAN SHORT Script Reading of THE BIKERS’ WAVE, by Damien Mazza

Genre: Drama, Family

A hopeless father tries to find hope in a journey to take his sick child to hospital.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Max: Peter-Mark Raphael
Mr. Pickles: Scott McCulloch
Mrs. Pickles: Val Cole
Ben: Gabriel Darku

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TV COMEDY BEST SCENE Reading of AMERICAN SCHOOL, by Michael Hager

Genre: Comedy, Sitcom

A fish out of water comedy whereby two expats cope with bugs and perils and other misfits while living in Latin America and working in a private school run by a bipolar-ish principal.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Matt Goddard: Peter-Mark Raphael
Pete Sanderson: Scott McCulloch
Gladys Sanderson: Val Cole
Sarah Goddard: Ali Chappell

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TV COMEDY BEST SCENE Reading of FUNNY FARM, by Deshon Porter & Donnell Porter

Genre: Comedy, Political

A hotshot young politician pus his campaign on hold when he pleads insanity to escape jail time, but he spends more time trying to earn his career back than his sanity.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Jessica: Ali Chappell
Server: Scott McCulloch
Sam: Gabriel Darku
Cashier: Val Cole
Delivery Person: Peter-Mark Raphael

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TV COMEDY BEST SCENE Reading of A MATTER OF BAD TASTE, by Gene Gwynne

Genre: Adult Comedy

The Grubb family experience the effects of advertising as Sis appears on voyeur TV; little Brother stays home to watch porno; while Mon and Dad eat out at a crappy restaurant; sponsored by Queerios, S&M’s, Pap Smear Ribbon Beer, and B S Coffee.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Jacqui: Ali Chappell
Host: Scott McCulloch
Jack: Gabriel Darku

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TV COMEDY BEST SCENE Reading of Crude Investigations, by Chris Roberts

Genre: Comedy

Logline: In this mockumentary, a frustrated and guilt-ridden ghost hunter and his comically inept squad of investigators have one night to find evidence of the afterlife to save their cable TV show.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Val Cole
Harv: Peter-Mark Raphael
Chris: Scott McCulloch
Sohrab: Gabriel Darku

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TV COMEDY BEST SCENE Reading of ED’S DOOR & WINDOW CO., by Parker Cross Jr.

Genre: Comedy

When a small business owner dies without any heirs, the employees decide to keep running the company. Unfortunately, they’re all either defective, dangerous or despicable. Why would a dying man ever force these horrible people to work together?

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Val Cole
Watermelon Ellen: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Jesus: Peter-Mark Raphael
De Sean: Gabriel Darku
Laura: Ali Chappell
Heil: Scott McCulloch

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TV SCI-FI BEST SCENE Reading of NOVEMBER OF MY SOUL, by Jack Trammell

Genre: Paranormal, Drama, Sci-Fi

November of My Soul is a paranormal TV pilot that chronicles a team of investigative misfits. Penny Walsh typifies them, working with children with profound disabilities by day, but chasing ghosts by night. Their cases take them to places where many unexplained things happen and are documented, but most importantly, to places where human behavior can’t be explained, and is the most paranormal activity of all.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Michael: Scott McCulloch
Margaret: Val Cole
Josh: Gabriel Darku

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TV THRILLER BEST SCENE Reading of MOISH’S MOB, by David R. Weinraub

Genre: Crime, Mob, Thriller

Partnering with the Israeli Mossad, brilliant, bisexual and manipulative Saul Cohen leads five neighborhood friends from Moish’s Luncheonette in North Philly, on a takeover of the South Philly mob, and into the world of international intrigue.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Saul: Peter-Mark Raphael
Don: Scott McCulloch

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TV THRILLER BEST SCENE Reading of CELTIC BLOOD, by Richard William Masterson

Crime Thriller

Logline: A young Irish criminal rebuilds his boss’s empire in the US, while becoming a target of a massive conspiracy within the FBI.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Teddy: Peter-Mark Raphael
Connelly/Fitzpatrick: Scott McCulloch
Michael: Gabriel Darku

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TV HORROR BEST SCENE Reading of PEEL, by Matthew Torti

Genre: Horror

Logline: A struggling make-up artist is given the opportunity to work alongside the industry’s most successful actor, who is secretly a real life monster.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Jimmy:Peter-Mark Raphael
Creedance: Scott McCulloch

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TV CRIME BEST SCENE Reading of LASTVIEW, by Candace Taylor Johnson

Genre: Crime Fiction

Lastview is a Crime Fiction in which a former police officer who witnesses the past events of dishonesty, war, love and loss of her former partner at a mystifying crime scene. She struggles to forget the vision and must gain control of her new position as the Warden of a Prison called Lastview.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Val Cole
Tasha: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Wills: Peter-Mark Raphael
Thomas: Scott McCulloch
Teal: Ali Chappell
Oren: Gabriel Darku

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TV ADVENTURE BEST SCENE Reading of FUTURE TENSE, by Kyle Williamson

Genre: Sci-Fi, Action, Adventure, Mystery, Thriller

Young, Rogue James Bond attempts to save the world from an extinction level event.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Val Cole
Max: Peter-Mark Raphael
Unnamed Woman: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Garrison: Scott McCulloch
Rob Lucas: Gabriel Darku

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DRAMA BEST SCENE Reading of ANA’S ORLOV, by Bradford Lee Walton

Genre: Action/Drama

A grieving sister becomes an undercover assassin within the sex slave industry, and in a battle of life and death, must seduce her enemies to discover the truth behind her sister’s kidnap.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Val Cole
Vlad: Peter-Mark Raphael

Liz: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Hans: Scott McCulloch
Margaret: Ali Chappell

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DRAMA BEST SCENE Reading of WHEN OUR CHERRY TREE IS IN THE WOODS, by Mariana Buric

Genre: Drama

Thomas is a teenager who longs for family love, but he finds this far away from home.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Father: Scott McCulloch
Alex: Peter-Mark Raphael
Thomas: Gabriel Darku

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DRAMA BEST SCENE Reading of SOMALILAND, by Clinton West

Genre: Drama, History

During 1993’s Operation Restore Hope in Somalia, a young sailor goes from naive innocent to battle weary veteran when he is inexplicably sent to join a combat Marine mission aimed at feeding a starving nation which quickly turns from a humanitarian effort to escalating clan warfare.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Jerome: Peter-Mark Raphael
Gunny: Scott McCulloch
Dave: Gabriel Darku

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DRAMA BEST SCENE Reading of THE BLACK HEART BOOK, by Carol Hoffman and Rosezelle Boggs-Qualls

Genre: Drama/Action/Adventure

A righteous family man finds his faith shaken by greedy neighbors and land disputes. When he happens upon a newspaper advertisement for a book with special powers and decides to buy it, he begins a spiritual journey that will test the moral fiber of his entire family.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Alex: Peter-Mark Raphael
Black Dog: Sean Ballantyne

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DRAMA BEST SCENE Reading of THE PASTOR’S WIFE DOES CRY, by Brenda Matthews

Genre: Drama

After losing everything and divorcing a drug using husband, a young woman finds solace in church. She meets the associate pulpit minister who was appointed Pastor of the most prestigious church. After marriage, this love story transforms into the Pastor’s spousal abuse, untreated bi-polar, and addictive prescription drug usage.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Val Cole
Claxton: Peter-Mark Raphael
Lady Bea: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Sis. Ware: Ali Chappell
Shahd: Scott McCulloch
Shaun: Gabriel Darku

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BIOGRAPHY BEST SCENE Reading of THE REDEMPTION OF JOHN PARKER, by John Connell

Genre: Biography, Drama, History

An embittered slave succeeds in business and buys his freedom, but inner peace eludes him until he joins forces with white abolitionists to risk life and limb as an Underground Railroad “conductor” pursued by slave owners and a sociopathic slave hunter.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
John Parker: Gabriel Darku
Cookie: Ali Chappell
White Nurse: Val Cole
Michael: Scott McCulloch
Will: Peter-Mark Raphael

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BIOGRAPHY BEST SCENE Reading of CATCH!, by Jerry Nield

Genre: Biography

Could David really defeat Goliath?

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Val Cole

Bertha: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Martha: Ali Chappell
Edison: Scott McCulloch
Ogre: Peter-Mark Raphael
Rufus: Gabriel Darku

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ROMANCE BEST SCENE Reading of SHE’S A DREAM, by Amanda Marie

Genre: Romantic-Comedy

Popstar TK Angel has become disillusioned with having everything his heart desires, but with pressures of possibly losing his contract, he seeks solace on a remote island, falls for a local girl, and experiences real love for the first time. Will he be able to trust her after she finds out who he is?

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Kayley: Ali Chappell
Chiara: Val Cole
Travon: Gabriel Darku

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SCI-FI BEST SCENE Reading of CHASING WHITE INFINITY, by Claudia Marinelli

Genre: SCI-FI/THRILLER/ADVENTURE

IN OUTER SPACE, FORMER VRS CHAMPION VALEN SURIA, NOW DISABLED, OVERCOMES HIS ENEMIES AND HIS OWN LIMITS RACING TO THE BOUNDARIES OF INFINITY.

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Dost: Scott McCulloch
Valen: Peter-Mark Raphael
Manish Mastap: Gabriel Darku

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WAR BEST SCENE Reading of DANGER IN THE CLOUDS, by John Donnellan

Genre: This is a True Adventure Story

Type: Feature Script

He flew with danger for sixteen years. One day danger got the best of him! This is the very exciting true story of one of a most unforgettable man, raised on a farm in Sodus, Michigan. His very exciting life really begins at the age of 13 when he was allowed to drive the family’s new Model T ford. You see, neither his Dad or his Mother had an inclination to drive the new car, but Joe did!

CAST LIST:
Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Joe: Peter-Mark Raphael
Lindy: Gabriel Darku
Sheriff: Scott McCulloch

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Op: Mary Cox

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TV Best Scene Screenplay of RANGERS: PROGENITORS OF FREEDOM, Timothy M Kestrel

 

Genre: History, Thriller, Drama

After his attempts to escape from the American colonies fail, a young orphan woodsman Finn finds himself trapped in a remote frontier fort surrounded by troubled people with dark secrets during the French & Indian War.

CAST LIST:

Narration: Carina Cojeen
Robert: Isai Rivera Blas
Finn: Anthony Yu
Catherina: Angelica Alejandro
Richard: Xavier de Guzman
Kopf: Fabio Abreu

Get to know the writer: 

What is your TV Pilot screenplay about?

It’s about making a moral choice and to live with the consequences. The beef of the show is that the only real freedom we have is in that we all can choose our reactions to even most horrible events, but we also must accept the impact of our response.

Why should this screenplay be made into a TV show?

This project is unlike any of its genres because it is exciting and dangerous, yet the themes and plot are relevant to modern audiences. Evocative use of historical figures provides a classic patina to the show. Audiences will love this American saga that covers the lives of many generations, dazzling geographic milieus and incorporates solid history. The story unfolds in a verdant natural paradise where the only evil is a man. They mainly respond to the elements of American frontier folklore that is presented in a new, compelling way.

The characters, fraught with their everyday problems in a war-torn frontier, provides compelling character stories for several seasons. They all have personal, individual emotional situations and dark secrets.

They have to make tough moral choices in difficult situations with no clear right or wrong. They cannot be sure that the choices they make are the right ones. They try to balance between love, regret, loneliness, debauchery, and moral values. The relationships in the storyline are valid and authentic full of emotion, sex, passion, hard times, and complexity.

How would you describe this script in two words?

The overall story, as told, is very vivid, visual and exciting. OK, that’s more than two, but it’s from Cinequest.

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Deadwood

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

2+ years

How many stories have you written?

I have written three books, three TV pilots, one short story, one short period drama for Virtual Reality, and have another five period drama stories in various stages of development.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

The Boys Are Back in Town from Irish hard rock band Thin Lizzy.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Serious self-doubt if I can pull it off. Writing a great screenplay is difficult.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

While I’m not writing exciting period drama stories, I draw inspiration from my love of history, Stoic philosophy, and my military experience as a US Army Ranger.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

A significant portion of the TV series I wrote takes place in Quebec. I discovered that the WILDsound Festival is growing by leaps and bounds and realized it is a perfect venue to introduce the story in Canada.

You entered your screenplay via FilmFreeway. What has been your experiences working with the submission platform site?

I love working with FilmFreeway, I highly recommend them. They have been most supportive throughout my projects and have provided me access to many competitions I didn’t even know existed.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Trust your vision, take feedback with a pinch of salt, and always be writing!

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

 

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ACTORFAN FICTION TV SPEC Screenplay – DOCTOR WHO
June 2017 Reading
by Paul Hewitt

ACTORTV SPEC of SUPERNATURAL
May 2017 Reading
by Bonnie Bonaduce

ACTORTV SPEC Screenplay – BOB’S BURGERS
April 2017 Reading
Written by Matthew J. Gonzalez

ACTORFAN FICTION Screenplay – EVERYBODY LOVES RAYMOND
March 2017 Reading
Written by Marc Mulcahy

ACTORTV SPEC Screenplay – THE FLASH TV series
February 2017 Reading
Written by Nader Hobballah

ACTORTV SPEC Screenplay – MODERN FAMILY “Relax, I Got This”
January 2017 Reading
Written by Edward Pronley

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WINNING TV SPEC Reading of SUPERNATURAL “Don’t Look Back” , by Bonnie Bonaduce

Winning Screenplay – SUPERNATURAL “Don’t Look Back”
Written by Bonnie Bonaduce
CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Becky Shrimpton
DEAN – Jason Martorino
SAM – John Marcucci
CASTIEL – Brogan Caulfield
EMMA – Roselie Williamson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Action, Adventure, Thriller, Romance

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

The logline best answers this question for SUPERNATURAL – “Don’t Look Back” – Dean, Sam and Castiel take extreme measures to save an unusual and innocent woman from an evil curse. However, the crux of the episode is to introduce the new character of Emma De Luca, a woman as embroiled in the supernatural universe as Dean and Sam, and to lay the foundation for an epic love triangle between Dean and Emma and Castiel. Time for Supernatural to grow up, leave the overdone “bromances” in the dust, and throw a strong, ass-kicking and yet sweet and vulnerable woman into the mix. Sparks will fly!

How does this episode fit into the context of the show?

This episode is designed to be a season-opener, and carries no baggage other than our main characters and the Men of Letter’s Bunker set, which from what I understand was incredibly expensive to build and will surely be available should my story be a miracle baby and make it to the small screen.

Have you watched every single episode of SUPERNATURAL?

I have watched every single episode of Supernatural, more than once. Some I could write from memory, such as my personal fave, “The Man Who Would be King”, which was also the first episode I ever saw. I must confess, I had never even watched Supernatural until this past January. Honest to God. I was working so many hours at my bring-home-the-bacon job that I seldom had time to watch anything longer than a sitcom. I guess I owe my newfound writing obsession to a miserable cold that forced me to kick back and actually relax for a while. I stumbled on “The Man Who Would be King”, got completely sucked in, and the rest is history. I think any writer attempting to write for an established show MUST take the time and effort to study their quarry. So much of great writing is in the nuances, the little things about a character or a concept that make all the difference.

How would you describe this script in two words?

If I could describe this script in two words, they would be GAME CHANGER.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The movie I have seen the most times in my life? That’s a hard one. I’d say it’s a toss up between any of the Lord of the Rings movies, all the Harry Potter movies, the entire Star Wars franchise, and “While You Were Sleeping”. Yes, that’s the romantic comedy with Sandra Bullock and Bill Pullman. Hey, I never said I was consistent. Or maybe I am…after all, I’m still mixing fantasy universes with romance.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I worked on this particular episode for about six weeks, on and off. My mind tends to run ahead, and I also spent time outlining and making general notes on several more sequel episodes. The follow up to “Don’t Look Back” is titled “Timing is Everything”, and it too is complete and making the contest rounds with DLB as we speak. I’m halfway through the third episode titled “Out of the Blue”, and also have 6 other episodes that I’m outlining/simmering. No rest for the obsessed, I’m afraid.

How many stories have you written?

I have no idea how many stories I’ve written. So many were written only in my head, because I never had the time to commit them to paper. I did write a romance novel and a screenplay that did well in some contests about 10 years ago, but then I took a long break from writing, like ten years of break, during which I was raising my kids and working my ass off, and just trying to keep the wolf from the door. Sometimes life just gets in the way…and sometimes we let it. I wish now that I’d taken more time for ME. And that would have meant writing. But no use in lamenting the past. We can only look forward.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

My favorite song? That’s an interesting question. At the moment, it’s got to be Carly Pearce – “Every Little Thing”. Yes, it’s a country song. This is me, saying, and saying it proudly, that although I love almost all music, Country music holds the key to my heart.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The only obstacle I faced in finishing “Don’t Look Back” was time. The story was simply bursting out of me, to the extent that I even dreamed about it at night, waking up at three a.m. and running to my computer to get the thoughts down before I could forget them. But time is an evil bitch, and with the deadline for so many important contests looming, I took a week of vacation time from my job to be able to give the writing the attention it deserved. Man, did I LOVE that week! All writing, all the time? Heaven.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Apart from writing, I am passionate about my kids, and living life to the fullest. I prioritize taking care of my health. I eat very well, don’t smoke or drink, hit the gym most every day, use a far-infrared sauna, and take a handful of supplements daily. As my wise grandma used to say, “An ounce of prevention is worth a pound of cure”.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I learned about the festival on line. First, as a new writer, I know how important it is to get my work out there, everywhere I can. I also value the feedback, although I always rely on my own instinct and taste. First and foremost, I write for myself. Especially for Supernatural, that makes sense to me, since I am part of their largest demographic viewership. I also loved the idea of having professional actors table read my work. So cool.

My initial reaction to the feedback was, Wow! He really liked my work. I mean, when the first sentence you read says, “An exceptionally well-written episode of Supernatural…” you know you’re off to a great start! I did incorporate the advice to lower my page count, and it was a good lesson in evaluating what scenes were absolutely crucial to the story. I really did learn something, and isn’t that the point?

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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Winning TV PILOT Reading – WHEN THE WORLD WAS SQUARE, by Irwin Greenstein

Winning Screenplay – WHEN THE WORLD WAS SQUARE
Written by Irwin Greenstein

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Frances Townend
NEAL – Peter Mark Raphael
ALLEN – Jonah Akler-Silliman
JACK – Christopher Huron
CAROLYN – Vanessa Quagliara
HENRY – Charles Gordon
SHEILA Kayla Farris

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Romance, Drama, LGBT

A moody, intense drama about the Beat Generation of writers during their time in San Francisco. Focusing on Allen Ginsberg, this pilot tells the story of their tragically entwined lives as they struggle with the responsibility and tediumof a “normal” life and try to recapture their identity.

What is your TV Pilot screenplay about?

Their fierce appetites for sex, drugs and freedom of expression push Beat icons Jack Kerouac, Allen Ginsberg and Neal Cassady to defy taboos of repressive 1950s America and ignite the anti-establishment insurgence that still makes headlines today.

Why should this screenplay be made into a TV show?

Commercially, “When the World was Square” presents the flip-side of Mad Men — the unrefined and raw sexuality and hipster fashions that have been largely ignored. Creatively, it presents and birth of America’s gay rights movement and pivot point toward the individual freedoms of expression we now enjoy.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Sexy and addictive.

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Black Sails

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

About 2 years.

How many stories have you written?

In terms of fiction, I’ve written my fair share of unproduced screenplays and unpublished novels — combined I would say about 10. But I’m a professional writer and I write non-fiction every day that’s available to me, so my output is very high.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Pink Floyd’s “Dark Side of the Moon.”

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Facing the challenge of integrating the research and history of the Beats into a compelling, structured narrative. You want to remain true to the original souls but at the same time portray their lives in a commercial and prescribed format.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Sports cars. It’s an expensive habit. Right now I have an old Porsche. Don’t ask about the repair bills. But drop the top on a beautiful day here in South Georgia and the experience is all worth it.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I would say it’s the dream of every aspiring screenwriter to see their work performed by people passionate about their craft, and short of a full-blown production a table read is really inspiring. The feedback was great. I took it all to heart and a few weeks laters ended up with a much-improved version.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

In retrospect, I would urge you all to stay in medical school. Short of that, strive for originality because even if you find yourself eventually drifting into commercial trends at least you would have started in place that’s true to yourself.


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Producer/Director: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting: Sean Ballantyne

TV PILOT Screenplay Reading – ECHOES OF BONNIEVILLE by Simon Schneider

Watch the winning February 2017 TV PILOT screenplay.

Winning Screenplay – ECHOES OF BONNIEVILLE
Written by Simon Schneider

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Geoff Mays
TULLY – Talia Price
WILLIX – Casey Estey
OFFICE HICKS – Philip Krusto
PETER – John Lester Phillips
JAMIE – Ursina Luther

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Horror, Thriller, Crime

A small town is rocked by creepy deaths where the victims have willingly offered themselves as a sacrifice to some unknown dark force. Investigating the murders are Officer Hicks, Sherriff Healy and visiting expert on the occult Dylan Willix but with the two cops mistrusting Dylan, progress is slow. Meanwhile, bored checkout girl Tully begins to experience strange visions that may link to the force behind the deaths.

Get to know the writer:

What is your TV PILOT screenplay about?

Echoes of Bonnieville follows Detective Dylan Willix, an investigator of the paranormal and occult, into the sleepy town of Bonnieville as he chases his Moby Dick: a serial killer with supernatural abilities. Meanwhile at the local convenience store, a disenfranchised customer service assistant named Tully Moorehead has the tedium of her life shaken up by otherworldly when she starts having gruesome visions.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

I think my pilot would fit in nicely in the current trend of cinematic television and it offers a shade of horror audiences won’t get from anywhere else.

What TV show do you keep watching over and over?

I try to watch as much as I possibly can but my personal highlights include Fargo, Stranger Things and of course Breaking Bad.

How would you describe this script in two words?

I’m going to cheat and use three: Otherworldly detective drama.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

This script has been in the works since I read Uzumaki, which was shortly after university in 2015. When I discovered Lovercraftian horror and how paralysing and twisted it could be I had to write my own. That’s when I started brainstorming.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve lost count. This is probably my forth big project, where I’ve set everything aside to make it perfect.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

The Lovecraft style of horror is so invasive and incomprehensible that I was compelled to give my version of it. When I researched how Lovecraft had been represented in recent times I felt that no one had quite done it justice, especially in television. It felt like an untapped market that audiences wanted to see and my confidence in that was what drove me.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

I encountered the usual obstacles of procrastination, self-doubt and the inability to illustrate on the page what I had in my head. The more I rewrote the script the more distant these problems felt though.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I’m passionate about video games, especially the spectacularly gory ones. They’re something I grew up with and they offer an experience unlike any other medium.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I was influenced to submit to WILDsound because of a previous experience submitting work to their short film competition and receiving such thorough feedback. So far, I have received lots of feedback on Echoes of Bonnieville but by far WILDsound’s was the most astute as it highlighted issues which I entirely agreed with. Ironically however, the feedback suggested one of the characters being a little pantomime (which was a fair criticism) but his dialogue was mostly lifted from real life scenarios. Go figure.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

My biggest advice to other writers out there is practice your craft. There’s always more you can learn and if people aren’t responding to your work, its because it needs refining somewhere. I remember being naively self-assured about some of my old work and I look back at it now and cringe. Truthfully, writing is a growing experience.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson