Winning SHORT Screenplay – THE RECEIPT, by Hazel Allan

Watch the October 2017 Winning Short Screenplay.

Genre: Drama, Crime

A coffee shop customer allows his ignorance to get the better of him.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Carina Cojeen
Esme: Lindsay Gerro
Zak: Nick Baillie
Man: Dennis Barham
Police: Fabio Abreu

Get to know the writer: 

What is your screenplay about?

It’s the story of Zak, a coffee shop customer who allows his ignorance to get the better of him.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Drama/tragedy.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Many years ago I witnessed a waitress having her hair pulled by a huge bully of a man. I chose to turn a blind eye and that decision has haunted me ever since. I want her to know I’m sorry and that I still think about her.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Harrowing. Chilling.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

‘Barefoot in the Park’. It’s my “go to movie” whenever I need cheering up.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I scribbled the original at the breakfast table one morning and typed it up later that day. The re-write took about two days to get to a point where I was happy with it.

How many stories have you written?

Hundreds, possibly even thousands, since I was a little girl. I now have three published children’s novels and approximately twenty screenplays of varying lengths.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the
most times in your life?)

‘Let’s Go Crazy’ by Prince. I love the lyrics. And what about that guitar solo! He’s my musical hero.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The ending was the most difficult part to write. I have a tendency to write in shorter time than what appears on the screen. I desperately wanted to get across Zak’s desolation and regret but found this a challenge within the constraints of such a short piece.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

My family, books, animals, food, politics, music, coffee. Not necessarily in that order!

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings
on the initial feedback you received?

I wanted to try my hand at writing something short and snappy. I tend to get carried away and write too much so this felt like the ideal opportunity to practise a spot of self editing. I was most impressed with the initial feedback and found the comments very thorough, encouraging and constructive. I took on board the recommendations and felt they really helped me to reflect and develop my story and my style of writing.

You entered your screenplay via FilmFreeway. What has been your
experiences working with the submission platform site?

My experience of Film Freeway has been a really positive one. I now look forward to their emails which have some great advice about festivals and competitions. At one point during the process of entering this competition I posted the wrong submission (duh!) and Film Freeway was extremely helpful and swift in replying to my call for help and sorting out my refund. Highly recommended.

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

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Winning Under 5min. Short Screenplay – ONE STOP SHOT, by Hazel Allan

Genre: Drama, Romance

James’s world is pretty dull and mundane, varying shades of gray – until his eyes meet Kerry’s on the train. He finally works up enough courage to talk to her, but is left devastated when she appears to ignore him. Dejected, he doesn’t acknowledge her on their next commute, which confuses her. Kerry later tells her friend that she thought he was ‘The One’ but she must’ve mis-read the signs – the twist being that she tells her friend this in sign language.

CAST LIST:

Narrator: Julian Ford
James: Steve Rizzo
Friend: Rachel Salsberg
Kerry: Emily Weir

 Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

It’s a light-hearted romantic comedy about love at first sight and the disappointment that too often accompanies this.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Romance.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Because it’s simple and endearing! The message that love might strike at any time offers hope and light in a world that is too often bleak. I think the characters would transfer well from paper onto screen. James is awkward and likeable, a hopeless romantic – and we can all relate to that just a little. Can’t we?

How would you describe this script in two words?

Charming yet frustrating!

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

‘When Harry Met Sally’. It’s sheer perfection.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

It didn’t take long. The characters came to me fully formed and were so endearing and straightforward that the story flowed. If there’s one thing I would change I’d like to add more hope to the ending. Perhaps James could see Kerry and her friend talking in sign language and the penny would drop?

How many stories have you written?

Too many to count but some of these have never seen the light of day. My main writing achievements are my three published children’s novels (The Bree McCready series), a six part family drama series which I am currently working on, and the two shorts I have had accepted by Wild Sound Festival.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

“Little Green” by Joni Mitchell. It never fails to make me cry.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Making the scene where James talks to Kerry for the first time feel authentic was a challenge. I mean why did he not simply tap her on the shoulder? But that would have been a dangerous move, as the miscommunication would too easily have been discovered. I had to keep everything brief due to the limited length of the piece.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Being a mum. Raising my son alone has been a challenging yet immensely rewarding journey. He is my inspiration.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I’m used to writing longer pieces with complex plot twists and turns. I wanted to try something short and snappy as I thought this would be an excellent opportunity to practise self editing. It was more difficult than I had anticipated! The initial feedback on ‘One Stop Shot’ was both thorough and constructive. I couldn’t believe it when I saw the word ‘winner’! The suggestions really helped me to reflect on my idea and think about how best to strengthen the story.

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Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Director: Kierston Drier
Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne
Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Mary Cox

Winning Short Screenplay: ELEVEN YEARS OF LIGHT, by Keith Soforic

Winning Screenplay – ELEVEN YEARS OF LIGHT
Written by Keith Soforic
CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Elizabeth Morriss
Daniel Chung
CHARLIE – John Fray
AUTOMATED VOICE – Cora Matheson

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Sci-Fi, War, Drama

Two men try to escape the bombs of a brutal war by using a T.D.U. (Time Dilation Unit) prototype.


Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

The Homeland is overcome by enemy forces. All friends and family are presumed dead. Two men try to escape the bombs of this brutal war by using a T.D.U. (Time Dilation Unit) prototype to alter their imminent demise.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Science-Fiction/Drama

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

I think it’s an intriguing situation in a contained environment with minimal characters, that asks a philosophical question, most people face everyday…How much of your time are you willing to sacrifice for the price of freedom?

How would you describe this script in two words?

Cheating Fate.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Not sure if these are the movies that I’ve watched the most, but several stand out; THE FOUNTAIN, THE PRESTIGE, ETERNAL SUNSHINE OF THE SPOTLESS MIND, THE PURSUIT OF HAPPYNESS, and AMERICAN MOVIE.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I had the initial idea and title about five years ago.

How many stories have you written?

Two Features, seven Shorts, and about a dozen Short Stories.

What is your favorite song?

The Italian singer-songwriter, Zucchero Fornaciari’s rendition of GUANTANAMERA

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The biggest obstacle in finishing this particular script was keeping it five pages or less, without losing too much of the story.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Finding Forest Fenn’s hidden treasure.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I liked the challenge of telling a story in a only five pages. It’s good practice for keeping a tight script. I haven’t shown the script around very much, but received very positive feedback from some close friends.

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne


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Winning SHORT Screenplay – MILKSHAKE, by Max Thackara

Winning Screenplay – MILKSHAKE
Written by Max Thackara

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Val Cole
TEDDY – Dan Cristofori
WAITRESS – Cassandra Guthrie
ALICE – Jane Hailes

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Romance, Drama

A young couple have an awkward meet in a 50s diner.

 
Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

It is a short script about a relationship between two young lovers, very much a cliché!

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Romance

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

This short script I believe would make an excellent and very emphatic short film for its use of music and soft tone.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Bitter sweet.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Probably ‘Step Brothers’

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I wrote this short script over a few days after having the idea/setting in mind for a while.

How many stories have you written?

As I haven’t been writing for long I am working on a number of scripts ideas at the moment, but have also written probably 3 or 4 short stories I’m proud of.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Starman (David Bowie)

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

I was unsure of the ending and how I wanted the story to unfold, but I have since changed it rather a lot with an ending I now feel is much more appropriate.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I was unsure of the ending and how I wanted the story to unfold, but I have since changed it rather a lot with an ending I now feel is much more appropriate.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I entered the festival as I believed this was one of my best short scripts. The feedback was brilliant and influenced me in the rewrite I completed recently. I was thrilled to be selected as obviously a lot of this is subjective, also it hopefully confirmed that my writing isn’t as awful as it was 6 months ago!

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Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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Winning SHORT Screenplay – SUNFLOWER CARE, by Della Greenawalt

Winning Screenplay – SUNFLOWER CARE
Written by Della Greenawalt

CAST LIST:

NARRATOR – Geoff Mays
DORIS – Cassandra Guthrie
GHOST – Dan Cristofori
DIRECTOR – Jane Hailes

SYNOPSIS:

Genre: Comedy, Fantasy

Feisty elderly Senior Doris is being taken into a nursing home, and boy is she not happy about it! But once settled in for the night, a ghostly figure awakens her, speaking to her from her bedroom Mirror, demanding to her that it is “time to go”.

 


Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

Doris is a hundred year old fighter who tries to stay out of a care facility for elders as well as outsmarting the Grim Reaper who has appeared yet again to take her from among the living. She beats the Reaper, but not the care center – yet.

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Comedy, Supernatural, Fantasy.

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

100 year old Doris is so popular with everyone who has read this script, and she could carry a movie with all her adventures. It would be in the vein of Fried Green Tomatoes. She is tough and funny.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Bittersweet and funny.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

The Princess Bride. It always makes me laugh.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

I wrote it in a day, spent a week tweaking it with the workshop members’ input. (I am a member of 5150, the Academy of Film Writing’s invitation only workshop run by Nicholls Fellow and working screenwriter Max Adams.)

How many stories have you written?

4 Screenplays (features) in various states of rewrite, half a dozen shorts, one comedy essay (that won my college’s humor contest) and a few more that got published (also during college) and some gathering dust in a drawer.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

There are so many. “What a Wonderful Life” by Louie Armstrong is high up on that list.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

None. It was a class assignment at the Academy of Film Writing and was so popular that I developed it into a short script. Once Doris was fleshed out, her story wrote itself!

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

I volunteer at an animal shelter walking dogs and bringing some home to give them a break from those concrete cages, posting photos to help get them adopted.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

The feedback was fabulous! As for entering the contest, some of my peers in workshop had entered in the past, winning and getting read by actors. They enjoyed the experience and encouraged me to enter.

 

 

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo http://www.matthewtoffolo.com

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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Interview with Rachel Reaugh, Winning Short Screenplay Writer (The Promise in a Bubble)

Ultimately, this screenplay is about hope, faith and the unbreakable bond of friendship in the the most random of circumstances.

Told through the eyes of Lisa and James, two eleven-year-old children who wake to find themselves trapped in a comfortable, yet mysterious bubble. Through the use of intense yet charming dialogue, Lisa and James begin to share their stories of who they are with one another, and slowly, they begin to uncover the clues behind what has happened to them.

– Writer Rachel Reaugh on her screenplay

    Watch the Short Screenplay THE PROMISE IN A BUBBLE

    CAST LIST:

    NARRATOR – Geoff Mays
    Lisa – Holly Sarchfield
    James – Andy Bridge

Matthew Toffolo interviews Rachel Reaugh:

Matthew: Why should this script be made into a movie?

Rachel: It is a heartwarming story that uses breathtaking cinematic imagery that is captivating, yet deeply touching and simplistic. This screenplay is also well written and very unique in exploring the concepts of mortality through the eyes of two eleven-year-old children. It is also a touching story that captures the everyday magic of strangers who become unlikely friends with an unbreakable bond.

Matthew: How long have you been writing stories?

Rachel: I’ve spent most of my childhood in the Children’s Hospital. Since I was six-year-old I have been telling inspiring and deeply imaginative stories to sick kids since then.

I have been writing screenplays for the last three years.

Matthew: What movie have you seen the most in your life?

Rachel: Alfred Hitchcock’s ‘Rear Window.’ AND, James Ivory’s ‘A Room With A View’.

Matthew: What artists would you love to work with?

Rachel: 1. Helen Mirren
2. Liam Neeson
3. Cate Blanchett
4. Maggie Smith
5. Adrien Brody
6. Kevin Spacey

Matthew: How many stories/screenplays have you written?

Rachel: I have written 17 short screenplays (ranging from 3 pages to 35 page for all budget types)

I have written 12 feature screenplays (for a variety of budget types).

Matthew: Ideally, where would you like to be in 5 years?

Rachel: 1. I will have won an Oscar for Best Original Screenplay.

2. I am a screenwriter who is in writing for and in demand by high profile Directors and Producers.

3. I am mentoring for ‘free’ screenwriters who have a deep love for screenwriting and just need encouragement and practical writing support.

Matthew: Describe your process; do you have a set routine, method for writing?

Rachel: This may sound odd, but the characters, for my screenplays, speak to me, and I just write the scenes and dialogue as I see them naturally.

Then, after that process is finished, I put the scenes together -like a puzzle – to fit the three Act structure of a screenplay and …edit, edit, edit, heavily.

I can’t stress the importance I place on editing my work. I even have my computer read the screenplay to me so that I can hear the narrative and dialogue and make sure that it sounds authentic.

Matthew: Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Rachel: I am passionate about helping the world heal their hearts and connect their hearts to their minds. I am also passionate about helping and inspiring people manifest their dreams into realities.

Matthew: What influenced you to enter the WILDsound Festival?

Rachel: I saw it on the International Screenwriting Association and trusted my instincts to submit this particular script.

Matthew: Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Rachel: If screenwriting is what you are in love with, never give up on it, even if you think no one will ever understand the vision of what you are writing. Keep writing from your heart and you’ll never go wrong.