Screenplay Festival: February 15, 2018 Event

The FEEDBACK Screenplay Festival’s 7th event of 2018 gives you a full reading of the winning comedy feature screenplay. Plus, readings of 4 best scene readings, and 3 short screenplay readings.

If there was a theme to this evening, it would be “Dirty Comedy”

CAST LIST: Peter Nelson, Neil Bennett, Daniel Cristofori, Peter-Mark Raphael, Brogan Caulfield, Regan Brown, Emily Weir


Comedy Feature Screenplay – POOP MOVIE, by Byron Erwin

Genre: Animation, Comedy

See the world from the Poop’s point of view as a cowardly outcast discovers his courage and bravery when he battles the evil Toilet Paper Empire in this animated action adventure.


Mr. Tee Pee: Daniel Cristofori
Lily: Emily Weir
Tootsie Roll: Brogan Caulfield
Narrator: Peter Nelson
Duke: Peter-Mark Raphael
Browneye: Neil Bennett
Floater: Regan Brown

1pg. Comedy Short Screenplay – A PARTING OF THE WAYS, by Marc Lalonde

Genre: Comedy

What does Ying-Yang really mean?


Narrator: Peter Nelson
Woman with Dog: Emily Weir

CRIME Short Screenplay – WHEN THE DUST SETTLES, by Derek W. Wright

Genre: Crime drama

On the day of New York’s most savage terrorist attack, mayhem and carnage fills the air. When the dust settles, two of the heroes believed to be victims of the terrorists actually left traces of their blood on the hands of an American.


Sgt. Jones: Daniel Cristofori
Kenny: Peter-Mark Raphael
Clem: Neil Bennett
Narrator: Peter Nelson
Gwen: Regan Brown
Tamara: Emily Weir
Xavier: Brogan Caulfield

SCI-FI Short Screenplay – TOGETHER, by Jade S. Bokhari

Genre: Sci-Fi, Action

As an apocalyptic asteroid heads to earth, a bereaved father hunts down his child’s killer; so dead or alive, his family is together to face the end.


Man: Peter-Mark Raphael
Ellie: Emily Weir
Narrator: Peter Nelson
Joe: Neil Bennett
Alice: Regan Brown

COMEDY Best Scene Screenplay – OCCUPY WALLY STREETSKI, by Mike Hoberg

Genre: Comedy

Funny things happen on Wall Street.


Finn: Brogan Caulfield
Reporter: Emily Weir
Narrator: Peter Nelson
Wally: Daniel Cristofori
Atticus: Neil Bennett

THRILLER Best Scene Screenplay – BACK FROM THE DEAD, by Jonah Jones

Genre: Thriller, Horror

A man walks through the fire.


Colonel: Neil Bennett
Narrator: Peter Nelson
Witch: Emily Weir
Desborough: Regan Brown

HORROR Best Scene Screenplay – TOUCH TABLE, by Scott Timmins

Genre: Psychological Horror/Thriller

When a troubled teenaged daughter of a Lutheran pastor, who no longer believes in God, discovers she has the ‘gift’ of second sight she must decide whether or not to use her power to help local police stop a serial killer. The decision this suicidal young woman choses is a twist no one will see coming, with audiences debating the ending long after this “Se7en meets The Dead Zone” film is over.


Narrator: Peter Nelson
Rick: Brogan Caulfield
Michelle: Emily Weir

STAGE PLAY Best Scene – BETWEEN THE LINES, by Dean Gilbert Tonkin & Stephen Gregory Barnes

Genre: Drama – two acts

Gathered at Ferlinghetti’s City Lights in 1959, an anti-establishment, avant-garde bevy of The Beat Generation share unfiltered views of the world through their kaleidoscopes of impulsive banter, improvisational music, songs, poems, and peer pique. Fifty years later, both the survivors and spirits of the dead Beats return to Ferlinghetti’s with their lenses in sharper focus to let us in on what really lies….between the lines.


Worm: Peter-Mark Raphael
Maxwell: Daniel Cristofori
Narrator: Emily Weir
Melvin/Rabbi: Neil Bennett
Bird: Brogan Caulfield
Simone: Regan Brown


Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Director: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Op: Mary Cox


Screenplay Festival: February 8, 2018 Event

The FEEDBACK Screenplay Festival’s 6th event of 2018 gives you a full reading of the winning TV PILOT screenplay. Plus, readings of 5 best scene readings, 5 short screenplay readings, and a TV Pilot 1st scene reading.

If there was a theme to this evening, it would be “Your past always comes back!”

Full Cast list: Val Cole, Gary Graham, John Fray, Kelci Stephenson,
James Dooley

TV PILOT – FAMILY SECRETS, by Allison Osborne

Genre: Crime, Drama, Thriller

Abigail Sullivan thinks she’s successfully run from her mob past, until the FBI catches up to her and gives her an ultimatum. Help them catch the rest of her criminal family or go to jail for the rest of her life.

Cast List:

Alvarez: Gary Graham
Ryker: James Dooley
Narrator: Val Cole
Brad: John Fray
Abigail: Kelci Stephenson

1st Scene Reading – THE LAST CAMPOS, by Mike Meade

Genre: Drama, Thriller

A couple gets lost in the woods.

Cast List:

Kevin: James Dooley
Man: Gary Graham
Narrator: Val Cole
Bill: John Fray
Chelsea: Kelci Stephenson

TV PILOT 1st Scene Reading – BY TOUCH, by Robert Cox

Genre: Sci-Fi, Drama

Anton Michaels is a college professor with a gift. To some people in the police force Anton is used to help catch criminals with his abnormal psychometric abilities. After an explosion at a nuclear power plant leaves one man as a prime suspect, Anton is called in by his friend Father John to help find his nephew David who he swears could not be involved with the rigged explosion but has mysteriously disappeared.

Cast List:

Jimmy: James Dooley
Woman: Kelci Stephenson
Narrator: Val Cole
Anton: John Fray
Father John: Gary Graham

TV PILOT Best Scene Reading – WHAT THE HELL, by Melissa Willis

Genre: Comedy

A single-camera comedy that follows a free-spirited young woman who’s lost everything and her four friends who are all forced to recreate their lives and themselves one humiliating, semi-permanent situation at a time.

Cast List:

Jamie: James Dooley
Narrator: Val Cole
Amy: Kelci Stephenson
The Messenger: Gary Graham


LGBT Best Scene Reading – LOOK IN MY EYES, by Eddie Baca

Genre: Drama

Gay sober military man meets Crimean Muslim taxi driver in NYC.

Cast List:

Narrator: Val Cole
Eddie: John Fray
Karim: James Dooley

SCI-FI Best Scene Reading – THE ITALIAN VACATION, by Claudia Marinelli

Genre: Sci-Fi, Thriller, Drama

Racing the boundaries of infinity in space.

Cast List:

Narrator: Val Cole
Giordano: Gary Graham
Rachel: Kelci Stephenson

Sci-Fi Best Scene Reading – THE REBORN, by Andrew S. Fisk

Genre: Sci-Fi

A world-class scientist is abducted by six people he brought back to life….and transformed into invincible warriors.

Cast List:

Carl: John Fray
Ellen: Kelci Stephenson
Narrator: Val Cole
Paul: Gary Graham
William: James Dooley


SHORT Screenplay Reading – AFTERLIFE ESTATES, by Laina Burgess

Genre: Comedy

Key figures and gods from all of the world’s religions meet at the Afterlife Estates office to go over the year’s numbers.

Cast List:

Guru: James Dooley
Narrator: Val Cole
Allah: Gary Graham
Noah: John Fray

SHORT Screenplay Reading – THE ORDER, by Jean Buschmann

Genre: Mystery, Suspense

If all the world’s a stage, who’s behind the curtain?

Cast List:
TV Commentator: James Dooley
Max: Gary Graham
Narrator: Val Cole
Nadia: Kelci Stephenson
Ethan: John Fray

SHORT Screenplay Reading – MOTORIST, by Julie Thor Fryd

Genre: Drama

“A depressed used-car dealer tries to convince a motorist, who every night runs over wounded animals, to also run him over”

Cast List:

Jeep: Kelci Stephenson
Voiceover: John Fray
Narrator: Val Cole
Volvo: James Dooley
Ford: Gary Graham

SHORT Screenplay Reading – THE TRENCH, by Chris Beadnell

Genre: War, Drama

After successfully shelling the German trench on the Somme battlefield, the British soldiers move in to clear the area of any enemy survivors.

Cast List:

Eason: John Fray
Carter: Gary Graham
Narrator: Val Cole

German Soldier: James Dooley


Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Director: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Op: Mary Cox

November 2017 – Read the best of Interviews with Award Winning Screenwriters

Matthew Toffolo interviews various award winning screenplays. Read insights and watch video readings of their work. 

Interview with Winning Screenwriter Hazel Allan (THE RECEIPT)

Interview with Screenwriter Heath Harris (RED)

Interview with Screenwriter Colin K. Stewart (BUNNYMAN BRIDGE)

Interview with Screenwriter Chris Parrish (MY ATARI CHRISTMAS)

Interview with Screenwriter Rob Ayling (LIVING IN CRIME ALLEY – Batman)

Interview with Screenwriter Brooke Elowe (BLACK WIDOW: FUGITIVE)

Interview with Screenplay Writer Dan Hass (THE UPSIDE OF OVER TV Pilot)

Interview with Winning Screenwriter Craig Page (THE BIGGEST LITTLE TV Pilot)

Interview with Winning Screenwriter Richard M. Kjeldgaard (NOWHERE VILLE)


WILDsound Announces its August 2017 Winning Screenplays

Watch the Winning Screenplay readings performed by professional actors at the monthly festival for August 2017:

Watch Recent Winning Readings

16 Winning Screenplays in Total!

2 Winning Feature Screenplays
– PEACE PLEDGE, by George M. Johnson
– THE LAST PRISON, by Richard Geiwitz

3 Winning TV Screenplays
– RICK & MORTY Spec, by Daniel Richardson
– EVERHART, by K. Wayman Dodd
– DISAPPEARANCE, by Jess Harris Distefano

1 Winning Fan Fiction Screenplay
– ROCKETEERS, by Gil Saint

5 1st Scene Screenplays
– WEBBED, by Robert Drusetta
– SILHOUETTE, by Lukas Hassel
– THE GATE, by Della Vance Greenwalt
– THE BIRTHING FIELD, by Robert Thorpe

5 Short and Best Scene Screenplays
– SID, by Auriga Ifill
– DAB A DUCK TAPE, by Stephanie Annis
– KEEP SMILING, by Courtney Wallace
– DADDY, by Bernard Leed

Winning FAN FICTION Screenplay – DR. WHO “The Kingdom of the Mara” by Paul Hewitt

Genre: Fantasy, Adventure

The Doctor accidentally picks up Shona and the two investigate a red comet that lands on Earth. The Doctor discovers the Mara are back, and must use their technology against them to defeat them once more.


Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
The Doctor: Brian Carleton
Shona: Konstantina Mantelos
Solomon: Anthony Botelho
Vladislav: Jack Comerford
Mila: Andrea Meister
Enok: Jordy Kieto

Get to know the writer:

What is your TV spec screenplay about DOCTOR WHO about?

The Doctor and Shona (last seen in the episode “Last Christmas”), find themselves in Bohemia during the Dark Ages. A tyrant, Lord Ivan, hoards a peculiar red crystal with telepathic powers called the Crimson. Wearing jewels made of Crimson, Lord Ivan and his followers collectively conjure a serpentine gestalt being from the darkest recesses of their minds: The Mara.

Possessed by The Mara, Lord Ivan quickly conquers all before him. He besieges the largest castle (and only cathedral) in the rival kingdom of Vladislav. The Doctor knows that walls, warriors and weapons are no match for the insidious, seductive spell of The Mara.

The Doctor and Shona rouse King Vladislav and his people to fight The Mara through very unconventional means – particularly for The Doctor. The world’s future truly rests on a hope and a prayer.

Why does this screenplay fit into the context of the show?

It’s a traditional good versus evil story with the odd bits of comedy and horror that you’d expect from Dr. Who. I wrote it for the 12th Doctor, Peter Capaldi – who I think is fabulous – a throwback to the 70’s Doctors, Jon Pertwee and Tom Baker.

This story is very much in the mold of classic Doctor Who. You have a historic setting that is disrupted by the presence of a perfidious alien – oh, and then there’s The Mara and a mysterious red crystal. Seriously though, The Mara was one of my favourite Who monsters from the 80’s and I am surprised it has not reappeared on TV (yet). The companion Tegan’s experience with the “evil dream snake” is what made her my favourite during the Peter Davison years.

We all know The Doctor’s companion is a surrogate for the audience and a great companion makes for a great Who story. I chose a character from a recent Christmas special – Shona McCullough (played wonderfully by actor Faye Marsay)– because I immediately saw in her the potential for a long term TARDIS traveller.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Faith Wins

What TV show do you keep watching over and over again?

Doctor Who
(also Game of Thrones, Mad Men…)

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

Six months (Off and On). So maybe 6 weeks’ worth of an actual research and writing (and rewriting).

How many stories have you written?

Two Features (Housesitting, Guttersnipe)
One Documentary (All About Me)
One Short (co-wrote) (Saved From The Grave)

Next up is my own TV series and this TV spec script was an excellent exercise in writing for this genre.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

In My Life (The Beatles)

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Time was my biggest obstacle… finding the time.

The second challenge was how to portray The Mara. It is obviously not my own creation, so I wanted to do justice to the original Mara stories with my version.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Acting, films, politics, history, rugby and beer (not necessarily in that order)

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

I had my first feature screenplay analyzed not once, but twice. I was impressed by the depth and value of the criticism. So I did not hesitate to submit my Doctor Who script for analysis and I am pleasantly surprised in the end to have it recognized here. Thank you.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

It’s an old cliché but true: Write what you know. That’s why I picked Doctor Who for my first TV screenplay.

Be prepared to take a lot of criticism along the way. Your story (and your skills) will benefit from it.

Procrastination is thine worst enemy.


Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

BEST Scene Reading of CONTINENTALIS, by Aurèle N’DJA

Genre: Sci-Fi, Thriller

Benjamin Monroe, eager to prove his father innocent of a crime he did not commit; goes back to his hometown only to find himself caught in the same dirty deeds his father is accused to. It’s Jumper meets Logan’s Run.


Narrator: Elizabeth Rose Morriss
Benjamin: Hugh Ritchie
Graham: Geoff Mays

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

​The story is set up in a post-apocalyptic drought ridden world; where a man who’s determined to prove his father innocent of a crime he didn’t commit finds himself involved in the very same dirty deeds his father is accused of.​

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

​It’s a sci fi thriller feature screenplay.​

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

​I believe the story offers a good entertainment. This screenplay is the first installment of a saga and I think that such a franchise would be welcome by the audience. It treats about teleportation, water resources; and on a human perspective, about trust, love, devotion, self-confidence, betrayal and faith.​

How would you describe this script in two words?

​New world.​

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

​Probably Die Hard with a Vengeance.​

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

​For the record, I first wrote Continentalis as a novel. It took me two years to build this world in my mind, then on the paper. After publishing the novel, I felt I needed to “see” it, I wanted people to really see what I see in my head. So, I decided to write the screenplay out from the book, and it took me around 6 months to do so. Such exercise is very constructive and exciting, trying to fold a 300-page story into a 100-page screenplay; I learned a lot.​

How many stories have you written?

​Couple of novels and few screenplays in different genres: romantic drama, sci fi, action, thriller, fantastic, horror.​

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

​It really depends on the period, if I’m writing or not, how do I feel, etc. From time to time I find one song I really like and I can listen to it 12 hours non-stop. For example, the song I’ve been listening a lot while writing this story is Medicine by The 1975.​

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

​​I faced three major obstacles during the writing:
I’m French, and not being a native English speaker appeared to be quite challenging in finding the right words to make the dialogues feel natural and smooth,

This screenplay being an adaptation, it was heart-breaking to cut some scenes I enjoyed writing in the book but were not crucial in the film. The difficulty was to keep certain coherence in adjusting the story to fit a reasonable screen time,

Being a sci fi story, it’s a challenge to describe sci fi elements (e.g. technology) in a screenplay so they can be understood just looking at it, rather than explaining their functioning in a book paragraph.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

​I like video games but I can’t find anymore the time to play between my job and the writing, which became a real passion through these past years.​

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

​I think I came across this festival by chance. I submitted the logline for this screenplay with no big expectations and found myself very surprised when it was elected logline of the day in April. The feedback I received was positive with constructive recommendations that I’m going to look into to strengthen the craft of the story. I think that’s a huge opportunity offered to authors to get such exposure on the industry and the market. Thanks for giving me that chance!


Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

WILDsound Announces its January 2017 Screenplay Winners

Submit your Screenplay to the Festival today:

Watch the 20 winning screenplays for January 2017 performed by professional actors.


1 – Feature Screenplay
– INCURBABLE by Jeff York

1 – Fan Fiction Screenplay

2 – TV Screenplays
– MODERN FAMILY “Relax, I Got This” by Edward Pronley

6 – Best Scene Screenplays
– KIDICIDE by Kelly Karam
– THE UNCONQUERABLE by Jonathan Fear
– THE LEGEND OF YAKATUTCH by Sean Francis Ellis
– SANDWICH by Deborah Klika
– THE ROSY HUE OF THE DYING DAY by Lauren Hoekstra
– NO MORE GOODBYES by Rebekah R. Ganiere

3 – 1st Scene Screenplays
– INT. CAR NIGHT by Martin Keady
– FAN SITE by Elisha Barnes
– OCD by Quyen Tran

7 – Short Screenplays
– PROTEST SEEN by Donald J. Bingle
– DIASPORA by David Brin
– COMES AROUND by Gunnar Halldorsson
– MODERN LOVE by Hannah Dillon
– PFFF by Dimitri Devyatkin
– I CAN CATCH A BULLET by Reynaldo A. Garza
– LOVE HURTS by Michael Gavino